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Thursday, July 11, 2013

Indiana Jones: The Kingdom of The Crystal Skull

Ok, The movie started off with a lot of potential. There was a cute group of teenagers drag racing in the 1950’s. A tribute I’m sure to Harrison Ford’s and George Lucas’ first collaboration. (A.k.a. American Graffiti.) The following scene was a major tease for a big plot potential. The only thing is it was just a tease. I didn’t like being teased in high school I most definitely didn’t like being teased hear. While the ending did supply a few laughs they weren’t enough to fill the awful void left behind by this blasé script. Before this movie even came out there was scuttlebutt about Shia La Beouf’s role in the movie. I thought he was cast as Indiana’s son from the beginning. Then the cast (being Ford and La La Beouf) were all tight lipped about it in interviews. I was beginning to think I was wrong about it. Was I wrong? Gee, I don’t want to give a way any plot spoilers but I wasn’t terribly surprised either. The only surprise here was in how many times I looked at my watch during this movie. I kept wondering, is it done yet is it finally over. I was actually looking forward to walking home in the wind at one point. Maybe it’s appropriate that is was so windy today. Because I was complexity blown away at the lackluster quality of writing in this script. Grade C+

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A note from an editor!

Hi Matthew,

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this piece, especially on a Saturday morning. I can tell you definitely took good notes of everything that was going on during the event!

We still have some work to do before this piece is ready to print. Your piece has a lot of information, but it doesn’t sound like a news article. What was the point of his speech/presentation? Why was he addressing this audience? What is Vanguard? What does the company do – who does it serve? You spend a lot of time narrating (for example, how he was injured), but did not report on the purpose of the event. You can maybe mention his appearance/joking about it in a sentence or two, but do not take several paragraphs to do so. Also, I like how you mentioned where the name “Vanguard” comes from.

There are a lot of spelling errors in this piece – make sure you proof read each sentence carefully.

I know I am getting back to you a little later I hoped, and I’m sorry about that! But if you have time tonight, please go through my suggestions and try to rework your piece. You can send me what you have tonight/tomorrow morning. Please bring a copy of it to the meeting tomorrow and we will discuss it further from there.

Once again, thanks for your hard work and promptness! Remember this is a learning process, and we are all part of the Waltonian team!

Talk to you soon!

Ten Most pathetic movie stars that still have careers.

(In A - B -C Order)

1. Hayden Christensen

2. Tom Crusie

3. Kevin Costner

4. Keeanu Reeves

5. Denise Richards

6. Adam Sandler

7. Arnold Schwarzenegger

8. William Shatner

9. Sylvester Stalloan

10. John Claude Van dahm