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Wednesday, December 11, 2013


   The first thing you learn in a drama class is that there is always a protagonist (good guy) and an antagonist (bad guy).  The “good guy” isn’t always good and the bad guy isn’t always bad.

         The movie has a bad guy and an obnoxious worse guy. The protagonists are the criminals with a lady on the side. The antagonist is (stop me if this sounds familiar) a group of slimy businessman running a legitimate jewelry business where al the merchandise is actually stolen. Danny Devito is the slimy businessman and Gene Hackman is his pawn.

         The characters are undeveloped and the writing is shallow at best. You never really know how to feel about anything. You are wondering the entire movie “what the hell is going on?” The script never really finds a particular path and stays on it.

The profanity and violence after a while seem to be in excess. Even the action sequences are dull and listless. This is one of the movies where it seems like the script simply thrown together to make a movie. It seems bland, boring, and lifeless.          

                                                                                     Grade F

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A note from an editor!

Hi Matthew,

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this piece, especially on a Saturday morning. I can tell you definitely took good notes of everything that was going on during the event!

We still have some work to do before this piece is ready to print. Your piece has a lot of information, but it doesn’t sound like a news article. What was the point of his speech/presentation? Why was he addressing this audience? What is Vanguard? What does the company do – who does it serve? You spend a lot of time narrating (for example, how he was injured), but did not report on the purpose of the event. You can maybe mention his appearance/joking about it in a sentence or two, but do not take several paragraphs to do so. Also, I like how you mentioned where the name “Vanguard” comes from.

There are a lot of spelling errors in this piece – make sure you proof read each sentence carefully.

I know I am getting back to you a little later I hoped, and I’m sorry about that! But if you have time tonight, please go through my suggestions and try to rework your piece. You can send me what you have tonight/tomorrow morning. Please bring a copy of it to the meeting tomorrow and we will discuss it further from there.

Once again, thanks for your hard work and promptness! Remember this is a learning process, and we are all part of the Waltonian team!

Talk to you soon!

Ten Most pathetic movie stars that still have careers.

(In A - B -C Order)

1. Hayden Christensen

2. Tom Crusie

3. Kevin Costner

4. Keeanu Reeves

5. Denise Richards

6. Adam Sandler

7. Arnold Schwarzenegger

8. William Shatner

9. Sylvester Stalloan

10. John Claude Van dahm