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Sunday, May 19, 2013

Star Trek: Nemesis

The first, last and only original thing about the movie took place in the opening credits. The fonts were creative and unique. The rest of the movie however seemed pieced together from various pieces of better more original scripts. There was a bit James Bond, a bit Star Trek II, shadows from many of the previous TNG episodes, books, and movies, and even a little piece of Star Wars. The movie was darker then any other, but you knew that from the trailers. The script took awhile to get moving. Movies are supposed to keep the audience on the edge of their seat not nodding of in it. There was no red herring, no suspense, no surprises and no nothing. (Nothing new and creative that is.) This movie seems to follow in the trend of other recent sequels like, Die Another Day, and Star Wars II this movie was darker then its predecessors. All Three seemed like jigsaw puzzles of better scripts. They felt like someone forced together pieces that weren’t supposed to be put together and bound them together with Scotch tape and glue. (Not very good glue or clear Scotch tape either.) While the movie was entertaining and somewhat suspenseful it failed to keep me on the edge of my seat. I instead felt like I was sitting in an old, worn out, easy chair. A comfortable feeling but not one you want to deliver to an audience in series like Star Trek. Grade C+

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A note from an editor!

Hi Matthew,

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this piece, especially on a Saturday morning. I can tell you definitely took good notes of everything that was going on during the event!

We still have some work to do before this piece is ready to print. Your piece has a lot of information, but it doesn’t sound like a news article. What was the point of his speech/presentation? Why was he addressing this audience? What is Vanguard? What does the company do – who does it serve? You spend a lot of time narrating (for example, how he was injured), but did not report on the purpose of the event. You can maybe mention his appearance/joking about it in a sentence or two, but do not take several paragraphs to do so. Also, I like how you mentioned where the name “Vanguard” comes from.

There are a lot of spelling errors in this piece – make sure you proof read each sentence carefully.

I know I am getting back to you a little later I hoped, and I’m sorry about that! But if you have time tonight, please go through my suggestions and try to rework your piece. You can send me what you have tonight/tomorrow morning. Please bring a copy of it to the meeting tomorrow and we will discuss it further from there.

Once again, thanks for your hard work and promptness! Remember this is a learning process, and we are all part of the Waltonian team!

Talk to you soon!

Ten Most pathetic movie stars that still have careers.

(In A - B -C Order)

1. Hayden Christensen

2. Tom Crusie

3. Kevin Costner

4. Keeanu Reeves

5. Denise Richards

6. Adam Sandler

7. Arnold Schwarzenegger

8. William Shatner

9. Sylvester Stalloan

10. John Claude Van dahm