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Saturday, April 27, 2013

Lost : The Pilot (less)

Ok, I admit I am sort of doing this in reverse. I already saw the season finale of what is supposed to be the next to last episode. I am therefore familiar with the characters and how they do or don’t pan out in thus aforementioned season cliff hanger. Now I’ll have to admit Ping Pong is correct. I am Lost in a sea of black smoke that hasn’t eve appeared yet. The characters are all good so far, The all have drive, charisma and a chance of potentially growing on you. That is the point however this is supposed to be the first aka pilot episode, is it not. I enjoy the music, I am in favor of the pacing. (so far) I even like the actor bearing an ultra cool name. I just I wish I were such a Fox. I can’t really do I full length movie like review since haven’t even seen all episodes on the first disk yet. All I can say is wow. I just wish Netflix would get me the 2nd disk here fsast enough and I still have to episodes to watch on this one. (disk)

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A note from an editor!

Hi Matthew,

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this piece, especially on a Saturday morning. I can tell you definitely took good notes of everything that was going on during the event!

We still have some work to do before this piece is ready to print. Your piece has a lot of information, but it doesn’t sound like a news article. What was the point of his speech/presentation? Why was he addressing this audience? What is Vanguard? What does the company do – who does it serve? You spend a lot of time narrating (for example, how he was injured), but did not report on the purpose of the event. You can maybe mention his appearance/joking about it in a sentence or two, but do not take several paragraphs to do so. Also, I like how you mentioned where the name “Vanguard” comes from.

There are a lot of spelling errors in this piece – make sure you proof read each sentence carefully.

I know I am getting back to you a little later I hoped, and I’m sorry about that! But if you have time tonight, please go through my suggestions and try to rework your piece. You can send me what you have tonight/tomorrow morning. Please bring a copy of it to the meeting tomorrow and we will discuss it further from there.

Once again, thanks for your hard work and promptness! Remember this is a learning process, and we are all part of the Waltonian team!

Talk to you soon!

Ten Most pathetic movie stars that still have careers.

(In A - B -C Order)

1. Hayden Christensen

2. Tom Crusie

3. Kevin Costner

4. Keeanu Reeves

5. Denise Richards

6. Adam Sandler

7. Arnold Schwarzenegger

8. William Shatner

9. Sylvester Stalloan

10. John Claude Van dahm