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Sunday, January 10, 2016

Austin and Ally (final show)

This last episode was awkward and unenjoyable. I have been fan of this Saturday morning show for it’s entire four-year run on the Disney Channel. I realize I am a hard critic and perhaps I was in a bad mood but this final episode simply failed to woo me.

 Okay I admit a 42-year-old man should not be watching a kids show. That being said,  have learned to appreciate almost anything and learn to see things through “young eyes”.

This how made me fell old however. The make up was not very good. The episode was supposed to put them ten years in the future . However the make up was not very good at making the characters look ANY different much less a decade older. The plot never moved me like the original show did. I admit being a hard critic so see this show for yourself and decide on your own. 

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A note from an editor!

Hi Matthew,

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this piece, especially on a Saturday morning. I can tell you definitely took good notes of everything that was going on during the event!

We still have some work to do before this piece is ready to print. Your piece has a lot of information, but it doesn’t sound like a news article. What was the point of his speech/presentation? Why was he addressing this audience? What is Vanguard? What does the company do – who does it serve? You spend a lot of time narrating (for example, how he was injured), but did not report on the purpose of the event. You can maybe mention his appearance/joking about it in a sentence or two, but do not take several paragraphs to do so. Also, I like how you mentioned where the name “Vanguard” comes from.

There are a lot of spelling errors in this piece – make sure you proof read each sentence carefully.

I know I am getting back to you a little later I hoped, and I’m sorry about that! But if you have time tonight, please go through my suggestions and try to rework your piece. You can send me what you have tonight/tomorrow morning. Please bring a copy of it to the meeting tomorrow and we will discuss it further from there.

Once again, thanks for your hard work and promptness! Remember this is a learning process, and we are all part of the Waltonian team!

Talk to you soon!

Ten Most pathetic movie stars that still have careers.

(In A - B -C Order)

1. Hayden Christensen

2. Tom Crusie

3. Kevin Costner

4. Keeanu Reeves

5. Denise Richards

6. Adam Sandler

7. Arnold Schwarzenegger

8. William Shatner

9. Sylvester Stalloan

10. John Claude Van dahm