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Saturday, July 19, 2014


This is a world where perfection rules and genetically enhanced babies are chosen as apposed to the “inferior” ones made the old fashion way. This is just one story that tell and that is the story of Gattaca. Things in the future could be better, as could this movie. The acting in this movie is fine and the storyline creative and intelligent. The pacing in this movie is perfect. It moved evenly the entire one hour and forty-six minutes. What I didn’t fall in love with in this movie is the entire package. It left me yearning for more and that in this case is not a good thing. This movie was good don’t get me wong it just came short of earing my highest grade. The film was creative and fun it just did not knock my socks off . this movie was like a long swin on a hot day. It was refreshing and well deserved, it just left me with a hole in my heart and gasping for air. Grade B

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A note from an editor!

Hi Matthew,

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this piece, especially on a Saturday morning. I can tell you definitely took good notes of everything that was going on during the event!

We still have some work to do before this piece is ready to print. Your piece has a lot of information, but it doesn’t sound like a news article. What was the point of his speech/presentation? Why was he addressing this audience? What is Vanguard? What does the company do – who does it serve? You spend a lot of time narrating (for example, how he was injured), but did not report on the purpose of the event. You can maybe mention his appearance/joking about it in a sentence or two, but do not take several paragraphs to do so. Also, I like how you mentioned where the name “Vanguard” comes from.

There are a lot of spelling errors in this piece – make sure you proof read each sentence carefully.

I know I am getting back to you a little later I hoped, and I’m sorry about that! But if you have time tonight, please go through my suggestions and try to rework your piece. You can send me what you have tonight/tomorrow morning. Please bring a copy of it to the meeting tomorrow and we will discuss it further from there.

Once again, thanks for your hard work and promptness! Remember this is a learning process, and we are all part of the Waltonian team!

Talk to you soon!

Ten Most pathetic movie stars that still have careers.

(In A - B -C Order)

1. Hayden Christensen

2. Tom Crusie

3. Kevin Costner

4. Keeanu Reeves

5. Denise Richards

6. Adam Sandler

7. Arnold Schwarzenegger

8. William Shatner

9. Sylvester Stalloan

10. John Claude Van dahm