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Friday, August 23, 2013

Stand By Me

This is the 3rd and final review dedicated to my biggest fan. (Hi Lizzy.) The film is about four twelve year old boys who want to become big and famous by fining the dead body of Ray Brower a local teen killed by the train. They follow thus said train tracks and find themselves along the way. They fight leaches, listen to barf stories, and develop a bond that will never be forgotten during their long trek. This is a short story written by my favorite author Steven King. He weaves quite a tale and made me feel as if I were 12 again. The story is done in flashback mode and made me flash black to when I was 12 years old. My friends then were Jason, Jon, and Harry and I could relate one friend to each character. This is a tale you will not soon forget I saw it before but jumped at the chance to review it for Miss Danger. Here is my review in whole, short but sweet and I hope it lives up to expectation to my biggest and most difficult to please fan. (You rock Lizzy.) Grade A+

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A note from an editor!

Hi Matthew,

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this piece, especially on a Saturday morning. I can tell you definitely took good notes of everything that was going on during the event!

We still have some work to do before this piece is ready to print. Your piece has a lot of information, but it doesn’t sound like a news article. What was the point of his speech/presentation? Why was he addressing this audience? What is Vanguard? What does the company do – who does it serve? You spend a lot of time narrating (for example, how he was injured), but did not report on the purpose of the event. You can maybe mention his appearance/joking about it in a sentence or two, but do not take several paragraphs to do so. Also, I like how you mentioned where the name “Vanguard” comes from.

There are a lot of spelling errors in this piece – make sure you proof read each sentence carefully.

I know I am getting back to you a little later I hoped, and I’m sorry about that! But if you have time tonight, please go through my suggestions and try to rework your piece. You can send me what you have tonight/tomorrow morning. Please bring a copy of it to the meeting tomorrow and we will discuss it further from there.

Once again, thanks for your hard work and promptness! Remember this is a learning process, and we are all part of the Waltonian team!

Talk to you soon!

Ten Most pathetic movie stars that still have careers.

(In A - B -C Order)

1. Hayden Christensen

2. Tom Crusie

3. Kevin Costner

4. Keeanu Reeves

5. Denise Richards

6. Adam Sandler

7. Arnold Schwarzenegger

8. William Shatner

9. Sylvester Stalloan

10. John Claude Van dahm